Please comment on this poem?

well....i think your poem was quite innovative and your choice of world is worth looking at too...though the poem would sound better if a rhyming scheme was there....still,i think its good like that too....for me, emotions are more important than everything in the poem put together and i don't know why but if didn't touch my heart or made me think...though,i maybe wrong...its just my opinion..but really ,the poem is good...i mean you look like someone who has a long way to go!! so, best of luck,pal...............